Comments on abstract, title, references

Title - The title is clear enough, relevant and informative.

Abstract - Study background and aim was clearly stated - in method section; information of tools for data collection and statistical analysis have not been mentioned - Conclusion was not linear with the result; why suddenly improving feeding practice and physical activity while the result didn’t show those data? - If you said that prevalence was high, but comparing to Southern Ethiopia study, the prevalence was 18% means that prevalence found in your study was far below 18%. So i think it’s not suitable to put tat way

Reference - Adding some more reference will be better to enrich the result and implication of your study.

Comments on introduction/background

• Paragraph 1-2 can be simplified; and more emphasize on risk factors that you’ll studied. Also, i haven’t see the reason why study was conducted in private school.

Comments on methodology

• Socio-economic status variable have not been describe yet.
• what kind of statistical test you used? especially to check the relations between variables

Comments on data and results

• In the DD of children section, lowest consumption of food group should be mentioned as well
• Also put in result description about the overall DDS
• In the method, you said that parents’ characteristic also become an independent variables >> mari- tal status of mother/caregivers, religion of the mother/ caregivers, family size, monthly income, occupation and educational status of parents), BUT you did not put as a risk factor in table 2. Please explain
• Frequency of snack >> no univariate analysis on this? how this data was obtained?

Comments on discussion and conclusions

• You still need to add more discussion; explore more how each risk factors could contribute to the oweight and obese
• For variable that not significant, ie. frequency of snack also need to be discussed; why is it not significant? etc.
• Conclusion is not relevant >> “Nutrition education on feeding practices and physical activities should be boosted.” No data on physical activity and feeding practice; you should be specific with the results