Comments on abstract, title, references

I appreciate the author’s approach, to connecting the abstract with the topic. Interesting study to read.

I advise the author to make abstract compelling and concise. Abstract: Good

Make the title more clear to understand. Title: Good

More references should be there. References: plagiarism search

Comments on introduction/background

• Try to convert Passive sentences into Active – To make a clearer reading. Use strong active verbs and varied sentence structure.

• Try to avoid needless words, phrases and/or repetitions

Comments on methodology

• Try to convert Passive sentences into Active – To make a clearer reading. Use strong active verbs and varied sentence structure.

• Try to avoid needless words, phrases and/or repetitions

Comments on data and results

• Try to convert Passive sentences into Active – To make a clearer reading. Use strong active verbs and varied sentence structure.

• Try to avoid needless words, phrases and/or repetitions

Comments on discussion and conclusions

• Try to convert Passive sentences into Active – To make a clearer reading. Use strong active verbs and varied sentence structure.

• Try to avoid needless words, phrases and/or repetitions